Journal #14 Writeup | Coursehero Helper

I’m trying to study for my English course and I need some help to understand this question.

Instructions:

To begin this assignment, compose your Journal 14 answering the following prompt:

1. Choose one of your Responses from this class; it is not important which one. Once you have chosen it, you are going to do a little surgery on a few of the sentences by employing the “Paramedic Method”; you are going to save the life of some of those sentences. You are a hero!
2. Choose three sentences from your response and paste them into this Journal entry.
3. Rewrite them after following the “Paramedic Method” steps below:

• Circle the prepositions. Eliminate any unnecessary prepositions.
• Identify any references to the researchers (the doer).
• Replace references to the researchers with a passive construction that emphasizes the experiment (what was done).
• Eliminate any unnecessary slow wind-ups.
• Eliminate any redundancies.

Write your original and revised sentences (150-250 words).

The response that requires to be revised is attached below

Also, this is a video attached that explains how paramedic phrasing works.